January 29 – February 04 is the fifth week of 2024 in the Gregorian calendar. During this week, we complete the Solar Term of Major Cold (Jan 20 – Feb 04), and have the micro-seasons of “The Mountain Stream Freezes Over” (Jan 25 – Jan 29) and “The Chicken Lays Her First Eggs” (Jan 30 – Feb 04). This week also marks the beginning of National Haiku Writing Month.
The haiku selected for this week are written by Basho, Issa, Buson, Shiki, Haritsu, Kerouac, and Kyoshi.
The 24 Solar Terms
The 24 solar terms were created by farmers in ancient China (206 BCE and 24 CE) to help guide their agricultural activities. Each solar term is 15 days long and is based on the climate around the city Xi’an, which was the capital of the Han Dynasty (206 BCE to 220 CE). (1)
Major Cold
Major Cold is the last Solar Term of winter and the last Solar Term in the Lunar Calendar. Snow, icy rain, and cold temperatures are common and welcomed during this time. The accumulation of snow will provide a reserve of water for the upcoming growing seasons, and the colder weather will help control the population of pests that might damage the spring crops.(2)
“A year’s plan starts with spring”
On February 04, 2024, we move into the Solar Term of Lichun or the Beginning of Spring. This is the first Solar Term of the new Lunar Year. “A year’s plan starts with spring” is a traditional saying associated with the beginning of Spring.(1)
The 72 Seasons
The 72-season calendar was established in 1685 by Japanese astronomer Shibukawa Shunkai. Each season lasts for about 5 days and offers “a poetic journey through the Japanese year in which the land awakens and blooms with life and activity before returning to slumber.”(4)
The micro-seasons for this week are “The Mountain Stream Freezes Over” (Jan 25 – Jan 29) and “The Chicken Lays Her First Eggs” (Jan 30 – Feb 04).
About A Chicken and Her Eggs
A chicken’s egg production is connected to the amount of available daylight because of the pineal gland. The pineal gland, which is located behind the hen’s eye, sends hormones to the hen’s ovaries and triggers egg production. The pineal gland only sends hormones when there is enough light.(5,6)
Hens usually start laying eggs when there are about 14 hours of daylight. However, the optimal conditions for egg laying are 16 hours of daylight.(5,6)
It is possible to manipulate a hen’s egg production with supplemental lighting. When using supplemental light to stimulate egg laying, the lights should be:
- low-intensity,
- placed on a timer so they will go on and off at the correct time,
- work in conjunction with a light sensor so they will turn off when there is enough natural sunlight, and
- be placed over feeders and waterers so there are places in the hen house that are not in the light.(6)
Astronomical Season
February 04, is the last day of week 05 of 2024. February 04 is also 45 days past the winter solstice and 44 days until the spring equinox. This places us at the midpoint between astronomical winter and astronomical spring, and you might also be noticing that the days are becoming longer.
Daylight Hours
The length of the day is calculated by counting the hours between sunrise and sunset. This means the length of day varies depending on where you are on the Earth. For example, in Northern Vermont, on the winter solstice, the length of the day was 8 hours and 51 minutes. In New Orleans Louisiana, the same day was 10 hours and 13 minutes long.
There is a slight discrepancy between the length of day and the actual amount of available daylight because of twilight. Twilight is the period before sunrise and after sunset when the atmosphere is partially illuminated by the sun. This happens because the sun has dipped below the horizon, but its light is still scattered in the upper atmosphere. Twilight usually lasts for about 20 or 30 minutes on either side of sunrise or sunset.
Seasonal haiku
The beginning of February marks the beginning of spring in both the Solar Terms and the 72-season calendar. The beginning of February is also the beginning of National Haiku Writing Month or NaHaiWriMo.
During National Haiku Writing Month, the goal is to write one haiku a day for the month. So to launch us into NaHaWriMo, I wanted to do something a little bit different with this week’s selected haiku.
This week, we are going to read examples of haiku and senryu that reference writing poetry.
Basho
it’s a beginning poem
the name of the renga master
at home on New Year’s
(translated by Jane Reichhold)
rabbit-ear iris
it gives me an idea
for a poem
(translated by Jane Reichhold)
Take a journey
And know my haiku
Autumn wind.
(translated by Takafumi Saito & William R. Nelson)
Issa
an off-the-cuff haiku
for a poor crop...
mountain cherry blossoms
(translated by David G. Lanoue)
first winter rain--
the world drowns
in haiku
(translated by David G. Lanoue)
a day for wandering
a day for haiku...
spring rain
(translated by David G. Lanoue)
Buson
I cannot write
in the spring rain —
how nice
(translated by Allan Persinger)
Shiki
Tell them
I was a persimmon eater
who liked haiku
(translated by Burton Watson)
Haritsu
cuckoo call–
a monk wrote haiku on a rock
and journeyed on
(retrieved for Haiku Enlightenment)
Kerouac
Blizzard in the suburbs
–the mailman
And the poet walking
Wild to sit on a haypile.
Writing Haikus,
Drinkin wine
Kyoshi
autumn wind
everything visible
is haiku
(retrieved for Haiku Enlightenment)
Haiku invitation
This week’s haiku invitation is to write a haiku or senryu that references writing poetry.
Share your haiku in the comments below, or post on your page and link back. I can’t wait to read what you write!
Also, let me know if you are going to take up the challenge of writing one haiku a day for the month of February.
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About the Haiku
Basho’s haiku were retrieved from “Matsuo Bashō’s haiku poems in romanized Japanese with English translations” Editor: Gábor Terebess. Issa’s haiku were retrieved from David G. Lanoue’s Haiku Guy. Buson’s haiku was retrieved from Foxfire: The Selected Poems of Yosa Buson. Jane Reichhold’s haiku were retrieved from Dictionary of Haiku. Kerouac’s haiku was retrieved from Kerouac’s Book of Haikus.
Resources
- “The 24 Solar Terms”; China Educational Tours
- 24 Solar Terms: 6 things you may not know about Major Cold; ChinaDaily.com
- 72 Seasons App
- “Japan’s 72 Microseasons”; Nippon.com
- “Why do chickens need sunlight?”. TheGoodLifeBackyard.com.au
- Ockert, Katie. “Decreasing daylight and its effect on laying hens”. Michigan State University
- National Haiku Writing Month Website
Mark,
Writers can get inspired by what they have already written, such is the case with this quad of Issho ni kaita retrans; Dressed Up
Sometimes we take parts and make up new ‘wholes’. I write everyday – not always haiku… so I’m not sure how the month of haiku will go.
Have a great weekend.
Wow, Jules. What a beautiful set of haiku. I especially liked AS about the walnut highboy not having any haiku. Nice mix of Carrot Ranch with Season Words.
You are disciplined, JP. You do write every day with imagination of mixing and matching prompts. I can manage a haiku a day, and so far I’m doing pretty well at managing to write at least one a day.
I think it only matters if you write a thought, to me spacific forms don’t matter. 🙂
Yet, you do it, and regularly. By the way, I loved your post ‘Live and Let Live,’ showing a darker side of you. Well done!
🙂
Hi Jules, Wonderful collection for this week. I like them all!
I hear you about writing everyday but not always haiku. I think I can do it if I give myself permission to count the “bad” ones.
Thanks again for sharing these. They are great.
All writing are various degrees of good. I don’t like everything I write either. But if only one person liked something I wrote than it was worth writing. Keep writing! 🙂
What a wonderful collection you’ve given us today, Jules. Thank you so much for sharing them.
…Just based on a passed on story.
a flitting seed landed in imaginations soil. 🙂
Lots of good haiku today! My favorite was Shiki’s. Here’s my contribution to the prompt.
paying attention
remembering the past–
haiku seeds
Peace,
LaMon
I agree, LaMon. I enjoyed reading the “writing about haiku” haiku.
Your haiku is wonderful, planting haiku seeds from the past. These are obviously heirloom haiku seeds. ~Nan
Hi LaMon,
I agree that these are some great haiku about haiku. I appreciate your use of “seeds” in your haiku. Very nice!
Haiku seeds!
Potential. Propagation and proliferation. And diversification through the growth cycles. Thanks for planting this poem.
Sorry, can’t do chickens but here’s one with sparrows:
February news;
Two sparrows on the feeder,
A haiku on the page.
Ashley 🙋♂️
Nice haiku, Ashley. I’d have trouble with writing about chickens, too. But sparrows, definitely!. ~Nan
Thanks Nan 🤗🙋♂️
Very nice, Ashley!
LaMon
Thanks, LaMon 🙋♂️
Hi Ashley, I like this one and I do appreciate that you tried to incorporate chickens. Sparrows do seem to fit haiku a little easier. I hope all is well!
Thanks Mark, we’re good over here, in fact today, Saturday, is a proper spring day! Of course, it can change quickly but for now, it’s glorious. Thanks for letting me use sparrows rather than chickens. Here it is again, but reworked:
February news!
Two sparrows on the hedge,
One haiku on my page.
It occurred to me that I was close to that old saying of “a bird in the hand is worth two in the bush” & it made me smile. 😊 Have a great weekend. 🙋♂️
That’s good news! Sparrows work and I like them even better on the hedge than the feeder. And you’ve got the haiku coming in to land. You got this.
Thank you D. I was pleased with my 2nd attempt. Off the cuff doesn’t always work for me; usually I need to revise!
Hi Ashley, I agree with D., great rewrite!
Thanks, Mark. 🙏 By the way, your blog has a very active & creative following. 👏🙋♂️
blowing your nose
one thousand times
is not a poem
[if “mucus” is not a winter kigo, it should be]
Griffin,
Mucus should be a winter kigo. I like your senryu, and hope you get over your cold. This reminds me of a poem my son wrote when he was in seventh grade. After writing four haiku (one for each season), then added
roses are red
violets are blue
this is a poem,
not a haiku.
~Nan
I love this. a newly created form
I always like haiku that make he smile–and this one brought out of chuckle!
LaMon
Yes, to mucus being a winter kigo! Genius idea.
I really like this one and then the continuation from Nan’s son. Its almost a challenge to write another poem or haiku that ends in “not a poem”.
Wishing you swift healing from whatever ails you!
You made a fine poem out of your misery though. When you sneeze say haikoo, not achoo, you’ll do great with this NaHaiWriMo thing. (Oof, now it sounds like a virus)
Feel better soon.
…but it could be.🤧😅
see the bright green winterweed invade the fallow garden
chickweed blooms
first hen’s egg
winter retreats
Wow, like both of these, Griffin, the monoku as well as the traditional haiku. The second one with the words “winter retreats” can be read several ways. Maybe we all need NaHaiWriMo to act as a winter retreat to write a haiku a day as every day brings us to spring as winter gives way (or as you say, winter retreats). ~Nan
A lovely thought, Nan, thanks — there is more in each line of the poem than the poet has imagined
Chickweed! What a great spring haiku that mentions chickweed. Somehow it is just there carpeting a garden that had just been snow covered. That and the hens laying are humble and real signs of light and spring.
Hi Mark,
I really love the fact that you wrote about NaHaiWriMo this week. It’s a good discipline that I’ve tried to follow for the last several years, but I find I have trouble with some of the prompts. I remember really having the hardest time with “tusk” from several years ago especially when Facebook’s auto-correct kept changing it.
The haiku by Issa of the “off-the-cuff haiku” is my favorite. Never read it before, but I find I write many “off-the-cuff” haiku now (and here I thought I invented the term off-the-cuff haiku. Darn!). Speaking of which, here are some haiku (off-the-cuff and otherwise):
tusk…
facebook autocorrects
to risk
~Nancy Brady, 2021
bird watching…
writing another haiku
about sparrows
~Nancy Brady, 2024
#offthecuffhaiku
writing haiku…
the scratching of pencils
on goldenrod tablets
~Nancy Brady, 2024
and a poem called “Word Play” I wrote for 44839: Poetry From a Zip Code
“There’s a poem in that,” we often say
after we banter about something that caught our attention.
Bouncing ideas off each other, sparking the imagination,
taking it one step further
until one takes word to paper.
For it is the interaction, the word play, the time together
that is important.
The poems are just a plus.
~Nancy Brady, 2017
Hi Nancy, I almost chose the Issa poem as my favorite. I liked it too. The proliferation of sparrows (how cute they are) makes your second haiku wonderfully understandable. Peace, LaMon
Hi LaMon,
How can you not love a haiku that starts with “an off-the-cuff haiku?” I know many people don’t like the ubiquitous sparrows, even calling them the “cockroaches of the bird world,” but I do. They are cute, have pretty markings, and there are so many varieties, too. I call that a win-win-win!
Ha Ha — cockroaches of the bird world. Well, they do like to hang around outdoor restaurants. But still… I too love the little darlings. Peace, LaMon
Hi Nan,
When I found the “off-the-cuff” haiku by Issa, I immediately thought of your off-the-cuff haiku. I guess you have been channeling Issa this whole time.
I also really appreciate you embracing the auto-correct to write “tusk”. These are all great!
Mark, I guess I was channeling Issa. I know that most people read haiku especially Basho, Buson, Issa to learn how to write better haiku. As a general rule, I don’t. I know I probably should except for the ones you post. As for my tusk haiku, it was a RISK I had to take. What’s more, I never came up with another haiku with the word tusk in it. Some day, maybe….
These are all so strong Nan, but as a former teacher, those goldenrod tablets really took me back.
I love that you and Issa are both so good at off-the-cuff haiku!
Thanks, Eavonka. That’s sweet of you to say…and here, I thought I made off-the-cuff haiku up. Alas…
We all used goldenrod tablets way-back-when, didn’t we? I learned to write cursive on them. but they were not good to make mistakes on. Erasers tore through the pages easily enough, or maybe it was just me.
Hi Nan: I really enjoyed your poems, especially the one about
“bird watching”. It says it all! 🙂
Thanks, Madeleine, for the kind remarks on my poems. Bird watching produces some fun haiku. 😉
🙂
Nan, I enjoyed each of these poems. So much so that I stole some of your words and reassembled them:
sparrows scratch, face risk
off-the cuff tough take on tusked
NaHaiWriMo
Thanks, D. I like the mash-up of your newest haiku. It works. The only reason for rules is to break them.
I once took a dictionary and randomly picked words based on the number on the page. For example, taking the fifteen word on the page. Then did it again and again on other pages until I had three lines. I don’t know that I could even find it, but I remember the first line. (Somewhere I probably still have it in my files.) It was: imagine conic. The rest of it is lost to me at this point, but I know I wrote in 5/7/5 like in 2007. ~Nan
doom scrolling
the need to find peace
in haiku
For me, all the forms of haikai provide an access to improved mental health especially as I am prone to deep sensitivity about what is happening in the world and our country.
I’m glad you focused on NaHaiWriMo because I do try to write at least one poem a day and often many more than that. I am so grateful that I’ve found a creative outlet that brings me to a meditative state.
Hi Eavonka:
I really enjoyed your piece on doom scrolling. I am guilty of it and I like how you bring your poem around to one of the benefits of writing haiku!
Amen to that, Maddy!
🙂
Thank you, Maddy. In this election year, I am going to need to lean on haiku heavily to help my mental health!
I hear you, Eavonka…haiku can help heal what troubles us!
Hi Eavonka,
Love your piece for this week. It rings true to me.
I have noticed that when I don’t find space to write it is because life feels too hectic. I enjoy writing practice because it asks me to be present and slow down.
Thanks for sharing!
Yes, exactly that, Mark. It allows us to practice what is sometimes called “flow” where time disappears in the excitement of creation. What’s left, I find, is more serenity.
Love this ku, E. So profound for so many ways. Let the doom scrolling go; it’s not good for anyone’s mental health especially yours and mine…write more haiku. I know what you mean about trying to write a haiku (or more) a day. That was my resolution for the year, but while I’ve written nearly 90 haiku (not counting renku verses) so far, I missed several days in January, and have already blown February. Like the rest of you, I’ll soldier on. ~Nan
I’m so glad this resonated with you, Nan. I should confess that I don’t care at all about actually writing each specific day but about how much I do create. So, if I write 5 one day and none the next, I still consider myself ahead.
You, at 90, are months ahead already, my friend! It’s so important not to get too rigid, I feel.
Eavonka,
It all in how I count them. Are iterations (similar haiku with several different takes on the words themselves) one haiku or all different haiku?
If each could be submitted, I would count them! (And no overthinking if it should be submitted)
No overthinking? I always overthink (and retreat often). By the way, have you been writing to the NaHaiWriMon’ s prompts? I wonder if just the word needs to be or does it have to be use as the “kigo?”
I am not on Facebook so I’ve never participated with the prompts. I just write as a normally do at this point. 😂
Eavonka, I don’t go to that group on Facebook very often. It is only during NaHaiWriMo that I go there even though there is a daily prompt given throughout the year. That’s only time I go there, basically to get some possible new material during the winter months.
Thanks for this. I get blocked when there’s so much going on but maybe trying to focus on a haiku a day is just the thing to do.
Yes, 3 lines of 17 or less syllables really whittles away any concerns about not having enough time.
My main go to in our daily paper is the funnies… and they aren’t always funny. I finally got a smart cell phone, but I ignore all the instant news. I know it is important to stay updated. But one’s heart can only take so much. Writing helps us vent and heal.
Even though it is below freezing this morning I am thankful that the sun is out. And the moon in the morning sky was also a treat.
May we all lift positive thoughts to all those in need… May good seeds be planted and grow.
Amen to all of that, Jules! 💜
~Thanks
Today is my daughter’s birthday… out on a drive earlier we saw blossoming trees, the first time this year. I wanted to write something about my thrill (I was happy to find out later today it was National Haiku Writing Month or NaHaiWrit Mo.)
first street
a tree with
white plum blossoms
It was also raining on our drive.
spring shower
the frog
squeaky clean
A poem for my daughter… I have her permission. 🙂
my daughter
doesn’t mind sharing her day
punxsutaney phil
…also didn’t mind hearing that spring is coming in the next six weeks:)
* punxsutawney phil
(spelling correction)
Wishing your daughter the happiest of birthdays, even if a bit belated–just consider the celebration extended. 😉
One of my college roommates had a birthday on the 2nd. I can’t remember which one because the other roommate had her birthday on the 5th of February. ~Nan
Awww…lol, will do! 🙂 My brother’s is on the fifth and my daughter-in-law’s on the 6th!
Awww, Nan, thank-you for the birthday wishes for my daughter! 🙂
It’s a hard word to spell.😂
Happy birthday to your daughter!
It also looks like your trip out provided you with lots of haiku material. And plum blossoms already?! That is amazing.
Thank-you Mark! Yes, plum blossoms are out!! 🙂
Hi Madeleine,
These haiku are so uplifting and charming…the plum blossoms, the spring shower, and Phil’s and Buckeye Chuck’s predictions (for once they were in accord). It’s times for crocuses!! ~Nan
Hi Nan, Thank-you! That is hilarious…they both agree! 🙂
Lovely poems Maddy… just as Nan said, uplifting and charming… wonderful
Thank-you Lia. That is very lovely of you to say! 🙂
What a productive drive! (windshields are the “best screen time”) Sounds like good omens on your daughter’s birthday. Sounds like spring has sprung there!
Thank-you for your lovely words, D. 🙂
So wonderful to be along for your drive and to celebrate your daughter’s birthday!
But mostly, yay for an early spring and all that will bring.
Lovely poems, Maddy.
Awww! Thanks Eavonka! 🙂 Yes! To an early spring!
February is a good month for Birthdays; My son’s FIL, the Twins in a couple of weeks… Others who are no longer with us…
Belated Happy Birthday to your daughter!
I really like the verse about the clean frog!! One time when I was cleaning out the gully area I came eyeball to eyeball with a frog (or a toad)! I told ‘it’ not to be afraid and that ‘it’ was beautiful and walked away. 🙂
Thanks, Jules. Sounds like a lovely experience…a very kind and sensitive thing to do. I am sure he understood you didn’t wish any harm on him.
Kind of like with dogs… they know who is kind.
Maybe. 🙂
I love the squeaky clean frog. We’ve already heard a few spring peepers on warmer nights.
Thanks, Griffin.
I love all the poems: La Mon’s about Haiku seeds and Griffith’s …I am sorry about the cold and Ashley’s February news! That is as far as I got. I will read more soon. I haven’t had a chance to read your post thoroughly Mark. Hope everyone has a great weekend! 8pm, over here! 🙂
Hi Mark:
It’s so interesting about the length of light for the hen to lay an egg.
I enjoyed Basho’s “…rabbit-ear iris…” and Buson’s “…I can not write in the spring rain…”
Jules, I really like your poems, especially your second, “…the seeds of fact planted with hearsay…” , a delight!
I hope you feel better soon Griffith. *I didn’t mean I am sorry for Ashley’s poem. I love your haiku, February news! …Two sparrows on the hedge…” is delightful! 🙂
Gulp. A haiku a day? That would be something.
nothing on the line
the holes I drill are too big
for the fish I catch
(Yes, that one breaks a rule or two)
But I’ve already written more than usual this year- thank you for the prompts. This one was written yesterday, so I’m only 1 under par.
falling snow
haiku whispering
blank pages
Oh, D. these haiku are wonderful. I really like the falling snow ku. I can just see the flakes fluttering to the ground. What rules did you break? We don’t have to follow no stinkin’ rules!
Besides, you channel Pal and Kid, and write like crazy fast and in an accent. If I manage even one of those 99-word story prompts, I am satisfied.
!Nan
Ha! No we don’t have to follow no stinkin’ rules. That was tongue in cheek. But some have said true haiku aren’t a single sentence, some wouldn’t approve the I in it. But I am inclined to just go where the prompt leads.
The Ranch Yarns are easy, that channel is a rushing torrent, but haiku? Haiku is hard work!
Hi D.
These haiku are very lovely. I love the irony in your first, nothing on the line..the second is beautiful and full of promise. 🙂
Thank you. I seem to be inspired by ice-fishing again. Glad they work.
I, too, don’t find any rules broken in your haiku, D. Avery.
I think they are both quite good. In fact, as someone who rarely writes 5-7-5 anymore, I was quite impressed by your first one. BTW, even if L2 and L3 is a complete sentence, L1 is still a fragment in juxtaposition to it! Issa frequently referred to himself within his poems so there is a rich history there as well.
Lovely — way more February than we have here in NC (see below)
Hi D.
It day four of NaHaiWriMo and I have written two haiku. Not doing so well myself. Maybe I’ll change the goal to be write 28 haiku by the end of the month. Rules are silly.
Both of these are really good and I really like “nothing on the line”.
D.,
One is only as behind as they thing they might be. I am not worried about a haiku everyday… I read the prompts are going on the ‘…NATO Phonetic alphabet since the first three prompts have been alpha, bravo, and charlie.’
Breaking rules is one of my specialties…
Yes, blank pages… imagine as each flake is supposed to be an individual… if each were a haiku?
Great philosophy presented here, JP.
One haiku a day is doable, but I get into moods where my imagination is dry, D. Then I write nothing. I am more like Eavonka in that I won’t write anything, but then manage five or six in one day although I have this thing about writing the same haiku changing up the words just a bit (an iteration of the same haiku essentially), and I never know if it is one haiku or five haiku. If I count every one as a haiku, then ninety isn’t difficult at all. So my ninety is probably more like thirty.
Love, love, love this weekly dispatch. Thank you for all you do. Sally Quon
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Hi Sally, Thank you for the kind comment. I am glad you are enjoying these post and discussions.
planting a redbud
February sun
takes off my jacket
no frozen ground here in the NC foothills
Wonderful! Here is my response from northern Vermont-
mid-winter night
another poem about
my frozen toes
We seem to have less snow than usual, but its still cold!
Mark,
Lovely haiku, and I liked the mid-winter night and mixing it with the phrase starting with “another poem about” making it perfect for your prompt. Just using the line has potential for all sorts of haiku. Can you imagine a chapbook called “Another Poem” full of these?
mid-winter night
another poem about
snow flurries
~Nancy Brady, 2024
#offthecuffhaiku
I can see a chapbook like that! You could change up the 1st and 3rd line for all sorts of haiku/senryu.
Friday night
another poem about
loneliness
Absolutely, there are chapbook possibilities here.
I really like your Friday night haiku. It’s not just another poem and I could see this one picked up by some journal.
~Nan
See, catching up to 4 already!
Mark yours and Griffith’s poems are both wonderful and unique in your own way! I was charmed to read them both! 🙂
Mark, this is very witty. I enjoyed your poem very much. The fact that you are cold and writing another poem about your frozen toes… although I am hoping the weather hurries and warms up for you all! 🙂
…hope the weather warms up for all of us, really…still wearing sweaters in our neck of the woods! :).
Mark,
I’ve had to wear sox under the covers… my knees get cold too. Maybe because there aren’t a whole lot of blood vessels in the knee area?
Stay warm!
Griffin,
Love these trees, and glad you are planting them and writing haiku about it, too. ~Nan
I love the future-leaning feeling of this one… in a few months the sun won’t need to coax you, and the redbud will be on its way!
Thanks, Mark, for the reminder of climactic relativism! I will say I’m wearing my sleeping cap at night.
OK if we keep offering daily NaHaiWriMo tidbits?
tea on the porch
gingerbread and
a layer of fleece
Griffin,
I really like this haiku (and now I am hungry for gingerbread topped with whipped cream and a cuppa. ~Nan
Yes, keep sharing your poem if you feel inspired!
Griffin, I really like this poem about tea on the porch. The poem about the redbud resonates. I hadn’t heard of a redbud before, so I looked it up. They are beautiful and aptly named. I liked that the first line flows into the second line so well, emphasizing the need to remove a jacket, even in the colder temperatures of February.
a break in the storm —
space for the urgent scratch of
pencil on paper
(Did my eye briefly catch on Nancy’s pencil scratch as I skimmed my way down here before heading up to bed? Probably!)
Hi Shelley,
Thanks for adding this haiku about writing haiku! I have found this to be a really from prompt. We all seem to have a lot of material to work from.
Shelley,
A fantastic haiku about writing; I really like this one. Just what the Man (Mark) asked for, And yes, I did mention pencil scratches above.
Nan
Thank you, Nan, for your kind words. And I have a recommendation for a great spot for that gingerbread with whipped cream and a cuppa you were hankering for… the Irish Loop Café on Witless Bay in Newfoundland.
Now *I* have a hankering! 🙂
Shelley,
If I get up there, I will be sure to check the Loop Cafe. It sounds delicious. Gingerbread is one of my favorite desserts. Thanks for the suggestion. ~Nan
Hi Shelley, there is a lot of depth to your poem. I like that “break” in the first line works so well with “space” in the second… a wonderful haiku! I enjoyed reading it.
Thanks so much for the gifts of your attention and appreciation, Maddy!
Awww, your welcome, Shelley.
Nan and Shelley, Griffith’s ginger bread with cream topping and a cuppa have us all hankering! 🙂 lol!
I mean, Griffin!
Agree, Madeleine. Sounds like a road trip to Newfoundland is in order, don’t you think?
Agreed, Nan! Lol!
Yes, definitely!
spring rain
a new leaf
falls at her feet
Maddy, this is great, but I’d make one small edit.
spring rain
a new leaf falls
at her feet
2 reasons:
I prefer short/long/short
L3 becomes more of a surprise because L2 makes us wonder, where?
Thank-you, Eavonka…this is much better. Yes, short, long and short…it makes sense. A very good question to ask. 🙂 Hope you are staying dry with all the rain happening.
We’ve been huddled up for the last 3 days. We are lucky to have an apartment above garages so, though we have some window leaks, we have weathered the storm.
That said, I am afraid of what it looks like out there. The winds were fierce, and the palm fronds must be everywhere. There’s been serious flooding throughout LA County.
Concerned about you and all the rain. Hope you continue to stay safe with no more flooding.
Yes, we are quite well, but it’s hard not to watch the videos!
That’s true, E. I’ve seen too many of those videos (and other weather disasters) recently.
I like this, Madeleine, very simple, but very spring-like, too. After reading Eavonka’s comment about the small edit, I agree. Tweaking it as she suggested makes it. ~Nan
Thanks, Nan. I think so too 🙂
🙂
…Eavonka’s suggestion makes all the difference. 🙂
Hope that the storms didn’t affect where you are and you’re safe.
Eavonka, I am glad that you and yours are safe and you’ve weathered the storm all right. Thinking good thoughts. 🙂
…and sending your way!
Nicely done, Melissa. All three are just lovely, and writing haiku certainly takes away darkness and melancholy. ~Nan
Hi Melissa, Great offering for this week!
Hi Melissa: all three are beautiful. I agree with you and Nan… haiku can take away the darkness.